English editing: Paraphrase and smoothen the sentence. (800 words)

I wrote a research proposal about ‘the impact of feminist movement on male’s attitude‘, but some sentences are copied from other articles, and some sentences seem informal.

Therefore, I need help of
1. Paraphrase some paragraphs.
2. Smoothen the sentence into more academic style.
3. Reduce the number of words to around 800 words. (Now is 1274 words)

I have marked ‘which help do I need’ in every paragraph.
Some paragraphs need to be paraphrased, some only need to be smoothen.

The essay is in the attachment.

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